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Use Twitter to practice writing more concisely

Ever been to a party and been trapped by a non-stop talker? Those standing monologues (especially the ones by complete and total strangers) are annoying at best and a buzzkill at worst.

Droning on and on without engaging in any kind give-and-take dialogue is absolutely awful for the person on the receiving end.

That’s what I like so much about Twitter. The microblogging site lets you “talk” but forces you to do so in short snippets of 140 characters or less.

I recently conducted an informal survey of people who follow me and found that most think using Twitter has helping them communicate more concisely (and hence effectively).

Now, mind you, long prose certainly has it’s place. But in business writing I see so much extraneous copy that it drowns the core message. Get to the core message quickly. Put it first. Your reader will thank you and be more likely to take the appropriate action.

If you’re not on Twitter, sign up for a free account. Follow a few people (me included) and start paring down your dialogue. I promise you’ll be the life of the next party you go to.

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11 questions to spark creative copywriting

My guest  blogger Marcia Yudkin shares how to spark creative thinking when faced with writing about the boring, the mundane and the tedious.

Spruce Up Boring Product/Service Descriptions With Variety, Voice and Verve
by Marcia Yudkin

Sigh. You have another 17 product descriptions to go for your web site or catalog. You realize the reader was yawning long ago, and you’re going to scream for not knowing how to avoid making every widget sound the same.

To the rescue! Here’s a quick checklist to help you inject variety and freshness into your copy:

  • What problem does the widget solve, and for whom?
  • How long has the widget been selling steadily, and why?
  • What uses or occasions is the widget especially appropriate for?
  • Where would you normally find one of its ingredients or components being used?
  • What doesn’t the widget have, which makes it superior?
  • It’s a cross between a what and a what?
  • How will the user feel when using it?
  • What does this widget go well with?
  • What kind of testing went into making the widget?
  • Why might you want more than one widget?
  • Why is the price so reasonable?

Now look at your list of answers and choose one or more ideas that provide an appealing angle. Add the practical facts like how big and how much, and you’re done.

No matter how prosaic the item, no matter how similar it is to other items, ingenuity can make it stand up and wave “Buy me!” to a shopper.

Marcia Yudkin, author of Persuading on Paper and 10 other books, specializes in compelling, yet hype-free copywriting. This article is adapted from her report, 73 Ways to Describe a Widget: Never Be Brain Dead Again When Having to Write Catalog Copy or Sales Material.

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How a cow town's workforce strategy can help you create better content

I recently read an article in Columbus C.E.O. magazine called “Youth Ministry” about  what Columbus, Ohio is doing to lure young professionals to live and work in the city.

One of the sources in the story was quoted as saying Columbus could be a more inviting place for young professionals if it would:

  • Cease selling
  • Start building assets
  • Continue empowering people
  • Stop apologizing

Hmm.

Good for Columbus, sure.

But it’s also a four-part strategy for getting great copy.

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3 rules to transform calamitous copy into tantalizing text

On the TLC television show, “What Not to Wear” (WNTW), fashion experts Stacey London and Clinton Kelly employ style rules to make over real-life fashion disasters.

The dynamic duo teaches an unwitting fashion victim how to express his or her personal style with clothes and accessories that flatter their shape and size. Of course, London and Kelly help ensure that the style rules are followed precisely and the resulting makeover is always a rousing success.

Style rules also have their place in revamping something else — copy that’s lacking substance and style.

So here are my “3 Rules to Transform Calamitous Copy into Tantalizing Text.”

  1. Leverage your assets. The participants on WNTW are consistently told to focus on their most pleasing feature, such as their small rib cage, tiny waist or deep-brown eyes. And so it is with copy. Lead with the strongest content, whether it’s a claim, guarantee, benefit, headline or descriptor. Then let it stand. On its own. Without unnecessary adornment or clutter to detract.
  2. Minimize your flaws. WNTW is known for downplaying the, ahem, the big, the wide, the unflattering, the overt and the obvious. Calling attention to weaknesses is a mistake in copy as well and is most evident in rambling copy that says little to nothing. Instead, copy should be clear, concise, specific and benefit driven.
  3. Be true to your personality. Although WNTW often issues near-identical style rules, the outcome for each participant is always unique. That’s because London and Kelly coax the individual’s personality out little by little until it becomes integrated with the participant’s newly embraced fashion dos. Copy, too, can — and should — have personality. Choosing words that differentiate, injecting voice and tone, and making the copy very personal to both you and your audience make the copy more interesting to read, more persuasive and ultimately more impactful.

Agree? Disagree? Have your own tried-and-true style rule? Please share your comments.

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Completely mindless wordplay

Some days you’ve just gotta let words be fun!

So I created this image on a site called Wordle.

It “read” my blog and created the image. It’s unfortunate that it picked up words like “tartar sauce,” tho. Guess I should be careful what I blog about!

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Kudos to Clif Bar & Company – outstanding customer service

Got this letter from Clif Bar in response to my inquiry about my favorite Nutz Over Chocolate Luna Bars. Nicely done, Clif Bar & Company.

Great copy notes:

  • Sincere works
  • Took responsibility
  • Proactive in voice and tone
  • Answered the unarticulated questions of their consumers
  • Took a stance for quality

Dear Friends,

As athletes and outdoor adventurists, Kit and I are no strangers to challenging
situations.  They may be tough to get through, but they show us that we can achieve more than we ever
thought was possible.

Today, we’re facing a different kind of challenge.  Clif Bar expanded its voluntary recall due to a broader date range of potentially affected peanut products manufactured by Peanut Corporation of America, the focus of the FDA’s Salmonella investigation.

We know that our voluntary recall has shaken people’s confidence in our products.  And we are deeply sorry that it has caused concern and inconvenience among our consumers, retailers and business partners.

While there are many players in this complicated situation, we are not interested in finger pointing.

We are accountable for the food we make.  At this time, we can tell you that none of our recalled products has tested positive for Salmonella.  But in light of the FDA’s investigation and mounting consumer confusion, we are taking the following actions immediately:

Clif Bar is taking a break and temporarily suspending production and shipments of our recalled products with peanuts and peanut butter.  Now and during this break, consumers can enjoy our 91 other products that do not contain peanuts or peanut butter.

We’re reviewing our own business practices to ensure that we’re doing all we can to continue raising the bar in food quality and safety.

By doing this, we hope to cut through the confusion and give consumers peace of mind and confidence in future purchases of our products containing peanut ingredients.

In the coming months, the country’s food safety system will undergo intense scrutiny and potential changes.  We currently meet or exceed the food industry’s safety requirements, and we look to set and achieve higher standards than those required by governing bodies.

We appreciate that you hold Clif Bar – and us personally – to high standards.  As we face this challenge head-on, we thank you for your understanding and the support you’ve given us over the years.

Sincerely,

Gary Erickson & Kit Crawford
Co-Owners, Clif Bar & Company

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‘It’s not our fault …’ (or how copy supports customer service — good or bad

I’m feeling a bit snarky today so rather than fight it, I’m just going to embrace it.

I get snarky when the sun doesn’t shine enough, when people say one thing and do another, and whenever I hear someone whine.

Especially when I hear the whine.

Like the little girl in the post office the other day who kept demanding things unreasonably and disrespectfully of her mother who, of all things, gave in each and every time. Like the customer service person who talks about “them” in the order entry department as if they’re from another world instead of the same company. Like the grocery store clerk who goes on and on about how he has to work a whole four-hour shift and whine, blah, blah, blah, whine, without so much as a hello to, ahem, the customer.

See. Told you I was snarky.

What makes me even snarkier is when I hear four famous little words … “It’s not our fault.”

Oh, you don’t even have to hear those words verbatim to “hear” them, if you know what I mean. Plenty of companies imply it in their copy (ah, finally, the copy connection).

Here are some of the words, phrases and practices that scream “It’s not our fault …”

  • But …
  • We reserve the right to …
  • Unless …
  • Until …
  • Restocking fee
  • Saying you have a 100% return guarantee but then forcing your customer to take a merchandise exchange

Playing the blame game in any way does nothing to create relationship, dialogue or loyalty with your audience.

Instead, take a customer service cue from online shoe seller Zappos.com who happily refunds your purchase price and ships to and from for free. Or from online cosmetics giant Sephora.com who cheerfully and promptly replaces or refunds merchandise — no questions asked.

Good customer service words, phrases and practices include:

  • Free
  • Guaranteed
  • No questions asked
  • Just for you … (or any variation of “exclusively for you”)
  • Being clear about what you will do and then doing it — whether it’s making a return, calling back within a certain time or sending an email when out-of-stock merchandise is back in stock

That kind of service — and copy — says it all.

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26 tips for better communication

This post was was inspired by two things …

Read on … I promise you’ll learn something new or at least be reminded of something important.

  1. A friendly reminder about good communication
  2. Know who you’re talking to. Ask yourself these questions: Who is my audience? What do they expect to hear? What do they need to hear? What kinds of words will they respond to?
  3. Simple tip for audience insight
  4. Get to the point. Say what you have to say clearly and concisely. If it helps, pretend you’re talking to a child or explaining something to your grandmother.
  5. Common writing mistakes (almost) everyone makes
  6. Stop communicating to impress. Ditch the name-dropping, jargon-popping speak that characterizes much of American conversation.
  7. Lose the unnecessary words
  8. Do not repeat yourself or go on and on and on by saying the same thing multiple ways. In other words, lose the redundancies (like this one!).
  9. Find some new words
  10. Pause. It gives the reader or listener time to process what you’re saying. Hint: Punctuation is your natural pause in the written word.
  11. How to make your everyday email more effective
  12. Choose your words carefully. “He stepped down as CEO” sounds like the person quit or was fired; whereas “He completed his three-year term” sounds like the person achieved something.
  13. Such a post as this should be made more clear via editing
  14. Get personal, when appropriate. Speak “to” people; not “at” them.
  15. Why good writing is a lot like being in love
  16. Think before you communicate. Write your copy, set it aside and go back to it before sending or posting. In conversation, simply pause before continuing.
  17. Short and sweet
  18. Clarify vs. defend what you write or speak.
  19. How to write conversationally
  20. Skew toward the positive. Negativity rarely prospers.
  21. Become a storyteller
  22. Avoid clichés, jargon and buzzwords.
  23. How to replace blah, blah, blah language
  24. Keep the “who, what, when, where, why and how” in mind. Always.
  25. Stop sleepwalking through your copywriting
  26. Listen, listen, listen. ’Nuff said.
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Become a mentor

I always wanted a mentor. I never had one.

Even now, when I hear someone say, “My mentor …” I get a little wistful.

Sure, there were people in my career path who could’ve mentored me, but 20 years ago, it was the age of being a climber. Sorry to say, but the career women in my life were tight-lipped about their success.

In fact, I remember accompanying an editor of mine to a fancy BPW meeting. I was so excited to have been asked to go and it was clear that I was an ankle-biter in a sea of well-coiffed, impeccably dressed (replete with fancy floppy scarf ties) seniors. As I was standing there soaking it all in, a topic came up about finding a young, aspiring writer for a project. My editor-boss she said she didn’t know one.

Hello?!

I was standing right there.

Other people even commented that I might perhaps be a fit and they looked at me with sad eyes that said, “Sorry, she’s being an idiot.”

The editor-boss poo-pooed the idea. (BTW, she’s now a highly acclaimed editor at her state’s largest newspaper.)

So, instead of being bitter (wistful’s not the same as bitter), I’ve decided to give what I couldn’t get. I’ve signed up to be a mentor on www.thecreativecareer.com.

If you’re in the marketing communications field, I urge you to sign up to be a mentor, too. If you’re not, be a mentor anyway. It’ll do you and the world some good.

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